BLOG #2

After I read "Library Visit, Then Held at Gunpoint" by Charles M. Blow and " Building Attention Span" by David Brooks, I found that Blow's article is more successful in delivering his thesis statement. Because he used dialog, his paragraph are smaller than Brook's, which engages the reader to read his article. He explained what happened so perfectly and so smoothly to also help the reader to read his article, and lastly, it adds dramatic effects for the article. 

The first reason why Blow's article is more successful is because he used dialog. This dialog (conversation) was between his son and the police. " I got up slowly and continued to walk to my room. I was scared. My legs were shaking slightly, after a few more paces, the officer said. "Hey, my man. Can you step off to the side? I did." in this conversation between Blow's son and the policeman, it states what exactly happened after his son left from the library and got arrested.

The second reason why Blows article is more successful in delivering his thesis statement are his small paragraph, which encourages the reader to read the article, because I think its a higher chance for the reader to finish the article, from the first paragraph to the last one.

By saying it adds a dramatic effect; it means when people read short paragraphs, it encourages them to continue reading for what the next paragraph. for example, in the article " library visit, then Held At Gunpoint" the author(writer) explained what happened with his son when he went to the library. and because he got arrested since he was matching the suspect description, the reader wants to continue reading what the next paragraph will be.

last reason is because he explained what happen so perfectly and smoothly to also helps the reader to read his article, for example when he said "he lest the library around 5:45 P.M to check the status of a book he had requested, the book hadn't arrived yet, but since he was there he put in a request for some multimedia equipment for a project he was working on. Charles had explained this good paraph like he was there seeing what happens. adding those details like the time he had left the library or when he explained his sons feeling while he was arrested gives a higher chance for the reader to read his article.